By Jim Shimabukuro (assisted by Claude and Perplexity)
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Summary: This is a narrative generated by the Claude chatbot in response to a creative prompt exploring AI’s capabilities in storytelling. The story follows a homeless Asian man on Honolulu’s Ala Moana Boulevard, described in vivid sensory detail as he endures the harsh sun in silence and isolation. Despite his ragged appearance, hints of a refined past and possible family betrayal in China emerge. The narrative captures his gradual awakening from numbness, beginning with minute acknowledgments of food and water from passers-by, and culminating in his first tentative connection with David from the Golden Dragon restaurant, suggesting a possible path toward human connection and redemption. (Perplexity)

To explore the natural language generation (NLG) capabilities of AI ChatBots, I submitted the prompt below to Claude, an LLM (large language model similar to ChatGPT and Gemini) that’s known to excel in creative writing (as well as other specialties). I was impressed with its speed in developing the narrative and its ability to extrapolate an engaging whole from incomplete data and instructions provided in a prompt.

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Prompt: Write a 3000-word narrative that serves as the beginning of a short story of a homeless man sitting cross-legged in the hot sun on a sidewalk [on a viaduct] on Ala Moana Blvd [Nimitz Hwy], close to River Street, facing Honolulu Harbor and the steady flow of traffic, at the hottest midday point. He remains still with little or no movement, with head bowed slightly as if dozing. Filthy, clothes in tatters, barefoot, unkempt hair and beard. Age difficult to determine but anywhere from late twenties to late forties. Asian in origin, but gaunt and deeply sunburned. Survives on small offerings of bottled water and food provided by passers-by and workers from businesses close by. Foot traffic on this sidewalk is light so he doesn’t invite harassment. Doesn’t make eye contact and neither speaks nor acknowledges others’ attempts to communicate. Doesn’t thank those who give him food and water. They simply place the offerings on the ground close to him. Doesn’t seek shelter when it rains. Remains as is. At night, he moves to a spot under a bridge [viaduct] close by that spans Nuuanu Stream. Doesn’t seem to own anything except the rags he wears. No one knows where he came from or who he is. He appears to have no ID or wallet or money. He has no friends or acquaintances. He doesn’t seek the companionship of other homeless individuals. This narrative should capture the nearly imperceptible moment when he’s slowly becoming aware of the sensory information around him and his growing sense of being alive and capable of interacting with his environment. It’s as though he’s slowly emerging from the dead. Extrapolate a storyline that shows him gradually making contact with workers and the owner of a nearby Chinese restaurant and how he eventually begins to help out at the restaurant in exchange for a place to sleep in the restaurant when it’s closed. Plant seeds in the narrative that point to a possible history of family conspiracy in China to steal his wealth. Use a 3rd-person limited omniscience persona who is able to objectively observe him but not see into his mind. Use vivid sensory imagery to capture the texture of him and his environment. At the end of this 3,000-word narrative, the reader should be left wanting to learn more about him.

Claude’s response

I’ve crafted a 3,000-word narrative that follows your vision of a homeless man’s gradual awakening on the streets of Honolulu. The story captures that pivotal moment when he begins to emerge from his protective shell of numbness and starts to reconnect with the world around him.

The narrative employs vivid sensory details to paint the harsh reality of his existence while slowly revealing hints of his mysterious past. Through his encounter with David from the Golden Dragon restaurant, we see the first tentative steps toward human connection and the beginning of what might become his path to redemption.

The story plants several seeds about his possible history—his elegant hands suggesting refined work, his recognition of expertly prepared Chinese cuisine, and the uncle’s cryptic warning about “hungry ghosts” who remember who they used to be. These elements hint at a complex backstory involving family betrayal and lost wealth in China.

The third-person limited perspective maintains the mystery while allowing readers to experience his gradual awakening through sensory details and subtle behavioral changes. The ending leaves readers wanting to know more about his identity, his past, and whether he’ll continue on this path toward recovery and possible revenge.

Would you like me to develop any particular aspect of the story further or adjust the tone or focus of certain elements?

The story Claude created based on my prompt

The Awakening

The concrete beneath him had absorbed the morning sun and now radiated heat through the threadbare fabric of his pants, a slow burn that might have caused another person to shift or seek shade. But he remained motionless, cross-legged on the sidewalk of Ala Moana Boulevard, his body a study in stillness against the urban backdrop of Honolulu Harbor. The steady stream of traffic flowed past him like a river of metal and exhaust, the occasional truck’s air brakes hissing in counterpoint to the distant cry of harbor gulls.

His head hung forward at an angle that suggested sleep, though something in the subtle tension of his shoulders hinted at a different kind of suspension—not the relaxation of slumber, but the practiced stillness of someone who had learned to exist in the spaces between consciousness and oblivion. The sun beat down mercilessly on his scalp, where patches of skin showed through matted black hair streaked with premature gray. His beard, equally unkempt, had grown wild and long enough to partially obscure the sharp angles of what had once been a refined face.

The clothes he wore defied easy description—remnants of fabric that might have once been a shirt, now reduced to strips of cotton and synthetic blend held together by little more than habit and the salt-stiff residue of countless days under the tropical sun. His pants, originally dark blue or black, had faded to a mottled gray-brown, torn at both knees and frayed at the hems. No shoes protected his feet, which were thick with calluses and dirt, the nails long and yellowed. Yet despite the apparent neglect, there was something in his posture that spoke of discipline, of a body that had once known different circumstances.

The heat shimmered off the asphalt, creating wavering distortions in the air that made the harbor beyond seem to dance. Container ships sat at anchor like sleeping giants, their massive hulls dark against the blue-green water. The smell of diesel fuel mixed with the salt air and the faint sweetness of plumeria from a nearby tree, creating an olfactory cocktail that was distinctly Hawaiian yet tinged with the harsh realities of urban life.

A construction worker in a hard hat and fluorescent vest emerged from a nearby building, carrying a bottle of water that beaded with condensation in the heat. He approached cautiously, his work boots making small scraping sounds on the sidewalk. Without a word, he set the bottle down approximately three feet from the seated figure and backed away. The gesture was practiced, suggesting this was not the first time.

The man on the sidewalk gave no indication that he had noticed the offering. His breathing remained steady and shallow, his position unchanged. Only the slightest twitch of his left eyelid suggested awareness, a flutter so brief it might have been imagined. The construction worker stood for a moment longer, perhaps hoping for acknowledgment, then turned and walked back toward his building, his footsteps gradually fading into the ambient noise of the city.

Minutes passed. The water bottle sat untouched, its label slowly peeling in the heat. Then, with a movement so gradual it seemed geological in its pace, the man’s right hand began to uncurl from where it had rested on his thigh. The fingers, long and surprisingly elegant despite their coating of grime, extended toward the bottle. The motion was economical, precise—the hand of someone who had once performed tasks requiring fine motor control.

As his fingers closed around the plastic bottle, something shifted in the quality of his stillness. Where before there had been an absence, a void-like quality to his presence, now there was the faintest suggestion of… inhabitation. As if consciousness was seeping back into a vessel that had been emptied and left to bake in the sun.

He didn’t drink immediately. Instead, he held the bottle against his chest, feeling its coolness through the thin fabric of his shirt. The sensation seemed to trigger something deeper, a cascade of awareness that began with temperature and expanded outward. The roughness of the concrete beneath him became more pronounced. The weight of his own body, the pull of gravity, the heat pressing down from above—all of these sensations slowly assembled themselves into a coherent experience of being present in the world.

A delivery truck rumbled past, its engine straining under a heavy load, and for the first time in what might have been days, he lifted his head slightly. Not enough to make eye contact with anyone, but enough to register the play of light and shadow across the harbor, the way the sun caught the water and threw it back in brilliant fragments. His eyes, when they opened to narrow slits, were dark brown, almost black, with a quality that suggested depths that had been deliberately obscured.

The water, when he finally drank, tasted of plastic and minerals, but to his parched throat it might as well have been champagne. He drank slowly, methodically, as if the act of consuming liquid was something he had to remember how to do. A small amount dribbled down his chin, cutting a clean track through the accumulated dirt and stubble.

As the afternoon wore on, the foot traffic remained sparse. An elderly Filipino woman emerged from a small market across the street, carrying a plastic bag. She crossed at the light, moving with the careful deliberation of someone whose joints had begun to betray her. She placed a wrapped sandwich beside the empty water bottle, muttering something in Tagalog that might have been a prayer or a curse. Like the construction worker, she expected no response and received none.

But something was changing. The sandwich remained untouched for nearly an hour, but when he finally reached for it, his movements were more deliberate, more connected to intention. The wrapper crinkled as he opened it, revealing white bread, processed meat, and a single leaf of lettuce that had already begun to wilt in the heat. He ate methodically, chewing each bite thoroughly, as if his body was remembering the process of digestion.

The sun began its slow descent toward the western horizon, painting the sky in shades of orange and pink that reflected off the harbor’s surface. The temperature dropped slightly, though the concrete continued to radiate stored heat. With the approaching evening came subtle changes in the rhythm of the city—the traffic patterns shifted, the quality of light softened, and somewhere nearby, the smell of garlic and ginger began to compete with the diesel fumes.

Across the street, about fifty yards down, a narrow storefront displayed Chinese characters painted in red on a yellow background. Through the window, figures moved back and forth in what appeared to be a kitchen, their silhouettes backlit by fluorescent lights. The scent of cooking food grew stronger as the wind shifted, carrying with it the complex aromatics of soy sauce, star anise, and something else—something that caused the seated man to lift his head another degree, his nostrils flaring slightly.

For the first time, he turned his head deliberately toward the source of the smell. The movement was subtle, barely perceptible, but it represented a fundamental shift from passive endurance to active engagement with his environment. His eyes, still hidden beneath heavy lids, tracked the movement of shadows in the restaurant window. There was something in his posture that suggested recognition, though of what, even he might not have been able to say.

A young man in a white apron emerged from the restaurant, carrying a large bag toward a dumpster in the alley. He was Asian, probably in his twenties, with the quick, efficient movements of someone accustomed to kitchen work. As he lifted the bag to throw it away, he glanced across the street and noticed the figure on the sidewalk. He paused, studying the scene with the particular attention of someone who had learned to be observant about the neighborhood’s rhythms.

The young man disappeared back into the restaurant, but emerged again a few minutes later carrying a small Styrofoam container. He waited for the traffic to clear, then crossed the street with the purposeful stride of someone who had made a decision. Unlike the previous benefactors, he didn’t simply place the food and retreat. Instead, he crouched down about four feet away, setting the container within easy reach.

“Hot and sour soup,” he said quietly, his English accented but clear. “Good for you.”

The man on the sidewalk didn’t respond, but something in his stillness had changed. Where before there had been a quality of absence, now there was the suggestion of someone choosing not to respond rather than being incapable of it. The young man seemed to sense this distinction.

“I’m David,” he continued, settling into a more comfortable crouch. “I work at Golden Dragon.” He gestured toward the restaurant. “I see you here every day. Same spot, same time.” He paused, studying the weathered face. “You look like maybe you’re hungry for something familiar.”

The container of soup sat between them, steam rising from small holes in its lid. The smell was rich and complex—the tang of vinegar, the heat of white pepper, the earthiness of mushrooms and tofu. For a moment, neither man moved. Then, with the same geological slowness that had characterized his earlier movements, the seated man extended his hand toward the container.

As his fingers closed around the warm Styrofoam, something passed between them—not words or gestures, but a moment of recognition that transcended language. David nodded slightly, as if something had been confirmed, then stood and walked back toward the restaurant. At the door, he turned back briefly, but the man on the sidewalk had already begun to eat, his attention focused entirely on the soup.

The liquid was hot enough to burn his mouth, but he didn’t pull back. Instead, he seemed to welcome the sensation, as if the heat was helping to dissolve some internal barrier. He ate slowly, savoring each spoonful, and for the first time in what might have been weeks, his shoulders relaxed slightly. The soup was expertly made—the broth clear yet complex, the vegetables cut with precision, the seasoning balanced with the skill of someone who understood the subtle interplay of flavors.

As he ate, fragments of sensation began to coalesce into something approaching memory. The taste of properly prepared doubanjiang. The sound of cleavers on cutting boards. The controlled chaos of a professional kitchen during dinner service. These impressions floated through his consciousness like debris from a shipwreck, pieces of a life that seemed to belong to someone else.

The sun had nearly set by the time he finished the soup, and the harbor had transformed into a mirror of reflected lights. The rhythm of the city was shifting again, toward its evening cadence. In a few hours, he would make his way to the bridge that spanned Nuuanu Stream, where he would spend the night among the shadows and the sound of running water. But for now, he remained on the sidewalk, holding the empty container in his hands.

From across the street, David watched through the restaurant window as he wiped tables and prepared for the evening service. The older man who owned the restaurant—David’s uncle, though the relationship was more complex than that simple designation suggested—emerged from the kitchen and followed his nephew’s gaze.

“You gave him soup,” the older man observed. His English was more heavily accented than David’s, shaped by decades of speaking primarily Cantonese.

“He looked hungry,” David replied, not taking his eyes off the figure across the street.

“Hungry for soup, or hungry for something else?” The older man’s voice carried a weight that suggested he understood hungers that went beyond food.

David considered this. “Maybe both, Uncle.”

The older man nodded slowly. “Be careful with hungry ghosts,” he said. “Sometimes they wake up remembering who they used to be.”

As if summoned by these words, the man on the sidewalk began to move. Not the sudden, jerky motion of someone startled from sleep, but the deliberate, careful movement of someone testing the boundaries of his own body. He placed the empty container on the ground beside him, then slowly, joint by joint, began to unfold from his cross-legged position.

Standing, he was taller than his seated posture had suggested, though his frame was gaunt beneath the tattered clothes. He swayed slightly, as if the act of being vertical was something he had to relearn. For a moment, he stood perfectly still, his face turned toward the harbor where the last light of day was fading into purple twilight.

Then, without looking back at the restaurant or acknowledging the container he left behind, he began to walk. His pace was measured, deliberate, each step carefully placed. He moved toward the bridge like a man walking through water, his progress slow but inexorable.

Behind him, the empty soup container sat on the sidewalk, a small white dot in the gathering darkness. But its presence seemed to mark something more than just the remnants of a meal. It was evidence of a transaction, a moment when the careful barriers between isolation and connection had been briefly lowered.

In the restaurant, David continued to watch until the figure disappeared into the shadows beneath the bridge. His uncle had returned to the kitchen, but the conversation between them seemed to hang in the air like incense smoke. There were questions that hadn’t been asked, observations that hadn’t been spoken, and a sense that something had been set in motion that would require careful attention in the days to come.

The man himself moved through the darkness with the confidence of someone who had learned to navigate by senses other than sight. The bridge’s concrete supports created a maze of shadows and alcoves, and he chose his spot with the precision of long practice. As he settled into his nighttime position, the sounds of the city grew muted, replaced by the gentle murmur of water flowing toward the harbor.

In the darkness, he closed his eyes and let the taste of the soup linger on his tongue. It had been prepared with skill and care, but more than that, it had been prepared with knowledge—an understanding of flavors and techniques that spoke of tradition and training. The recognition of this craftsmanship had awakened something in him, a stirring in depths that had been carefully sealed away.

As he drifted toward sleep, images began to surface unbidden. A kitchen filled with stainless steel and steam. Hands that moved with practiced efficiency, creating dishes that were as much art as sustenance. The weight of responsibility, the pressure of maintaining standards that had been established over generations. And beneath it all, the gradual realization that everything he had worked for, everything he had built, was being systematically dismantled by those who should have been his allies.

But these memories were still too dangerous to fully examine. Instead, he let them drift past like clouds, acknowledging their presence without engaging with their content. Tomorrow would bring another day on the sidewalk, another opportunity to practice the careful balance between awareness and absence that had become his survival strategy.

Yet something had shifted. The soup had been more than nourishment—it had been a reminder that skill and knowledge could survive even the most devastating losses. And in the young man who had brought it, he had glimpsed something that might, eventually, be worth the risk of remembering who he used to be.

The water continued to flow beneath the bridge, carrying with it the detritus of the city toward the harbor and the open sea. In its constant movement, there was both the promise of renewal and the threat of being swept away. As sleep finally claimed him, the man who had no name and no past allowed himself to dream of flavors and techniques, of the precise timing required to create the perfect balance of hot and sour, and of the possibility that somewhere in this foreign place, he might find something that resembled home.

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